hopefully i don't go crazy and post every single poem i have on here, since i have about a hundred....I'm just so starved for editors/critism, since my friends are all used to them. I just want some new feedback, that's all. Don't be afraid to tell me how I can make improvements or change my poetry! thanks!

"Gone"

I didn't see my other being step away
Silently
I was half-asleep in the world of empty dreams
Peeking occasionally at the frozen night

The first moon doesn't linger long enough
For me to touch its reflection in the water
It shatters
But this time it's gone forever

Find me, I command my soul
Through the valleys of eternity where I have left myself behind
Blinking away moments of yesterday
See
The running waters in the deep blue stream.