You are truely a great writer. I know that you will make it far. I think that A walking Contradiction is my favortie. It really has no limitations. It was fun, witty and angry all at once. I love hate. Okay secondly, In Oh my god, there is just something that doesnt fit right here, I mean it is great and very intrigueing but I think this is what threw me off from the beginig.
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One night, somewhere, someplace in the past,
But it really doesn't matter when,
I lay in a bed that seemed colder then,
And my tears were falling wicked fast.
Okay, Tears and a cold bed fit in perfectly together, but I dont think that the word wicked worked too well in there. The rest of your poem seems very intellectual, and wicked just kinda threw me off there. Also, I think you threw fast in there just to rhyme, but it still sounds just as good. =) Okay now on loud and drunk, I think this is a very good poem, except for your rhymetical changes. The begining has no rhyme scheme and the rest of it rhymes very well. But the poem itself is very powerful.
I love them all and just wanted to provide you with some helpful critisim as you did to me!