i really like your idea, but i find the first person, present tense kind of confsuing. It might help if you made it so isabella is telling about something that allready happened to her. So it's still in first person, but it's not talking about it as if it was happening right that very instant. that gets a little confusing. If you want to try that but are confused ( i didn't explain very throughly) you can pm me!! keep up the work!!