I am going to be blunt cause well that's the way I work. Your writing is very amirable it I think can be published. Though you will need to look over your grammar. always look over your grammar believe me it helps. Also if you decide to publish make sure you submit to a legit poetry contest or company. As a fellow poet please remember that the greatest satisfaction comes from knowing how much the poems (the work you put your heart and soul into) are good enough for you and not anybody else.

-Rally

P.S. oh if um you wanted to read my poetry it Rally's poetry