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jtherlow · 01-12-2005, 08:59 PM

Jtherlowian Poetry

Hello all, my name be James. I have a habit of hating all my own work, but I won't bore you with all the things I think are wrong with my poems. Instead, I'll post them on here, so you can tell me with all the things YOU think are wrong with my poems! Deal?
Alrighty, let's begin:

Respect or Fear
They were everything I wanted to be:
Powerful, skilled, respected.
Everyone knew their names.

I wanted to be like them.
They let me into their group.
But I was never really respected.

He was everything I wanted to be:
Powerful, skilled, feared.
Everyone knows his name.
They just don't dare speak it.

Yep, that be my Peter Pettigrew poem. It was the first HP poem I ever wrote, that's the only reason I post it here now. I despise it.

01-12-2005, 08:59 PM	#1 (permalink)
jtherlow Puffskein Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Dancing to a song that was a hit before your mother was born. Posts: 1,926	Jtherlowian Rhapsody Jtherlowian Poetry Hello all, my name be James. I have a habit of hating all my own work, but I won't bore you with all the things I think are wrong with my poems. Instead, I'll post them on here, so you can tell me with all the things YOU think are wrong with my poems! Deal? Alrighty, let's begin: Respect or Fear They were everything I wanted to be: Powerful, skilled, respected. Everyone knew their names. I wanted to be like them. They let me into their group. But I was never really respected. He was everything I wanted to be: Powerful, skilled, feared. Everyone knows his name. They just don't dare speak it. Yep, that be my Peter Pettigrew poem. It was the first HP poem I ever wrote, that's the only reason I post it here now. I despise it. __________________ baptized into Seventh-Day Adventist church 6.17.06 Last edited by jtherlow; 01-30-2005 at 09:37 PM.