Hey Eviee, I have to hand it to you;
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I don't want to copyright J.K Rowling's work from her book and I don't want to re-write her wonderful work. If this makes sense. This is one of the times where it's unavoidable
I think you did a spectacular job writing this scene. It was very good the way you made it Narcissa's thoughts and worries.
This is a very powerful bit.
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Beside her sat her only song, white as a sheet she noted, who was taking a huge interest in his lap. She couldn't blame him he was far to young to be here and if she had her way he wouldn't. Or even her for that matter, she didn't want to be here she'd had enough. She'd been a Death Eater since way before Draco was born, she remembered when he was born she'd been afraid of the world he was going to grow up in and the destruction her and the rest of the them were inflicting to the world around them.
You let us see her as herself, not as Lucius's obedient wife, but as a mother and someone who is aware of her doings and the consequences of them.
Your next post is even better than the last one. How can that be; it was so good!
I loved this!
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To the left of him Narcissa stood stoned face, not moving. Her hand was rested lightly on Draco's arm, her husband stood to the other side of her son in a kind of huddle saying nothing, watching, waiting for the Dark Lord to speak.
I'm sure Draco wouldn't have been able to get through this ordeal if not for the love of his mother.
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To his intermediate right, a shaking Wormtail stood biting his nails till there was nothing left to bite. Snape gave him a look of disgust as his eyes rested on the man for a moment,
Snape is right the way he feels about Wormtail, he turns my stomach too! Arrgg! When I read this sentence I remembered seeing those horrid fingernails in the movies. AWFUL! And he was biting them! Anyway, moving on...This bit was extremely well written! I feel like I was there making the room even more cramped!
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Meanwhile, hours before the headmaster made his way back to the castle Professor McGonagall watched the last strays of the Professors she deeply trusted walk through her office door and take a space by the wall. Her office wasn't large enough to accommodate the amount of people it now held therefore it looked cluttered and she found it difficult to move. The last person to enter was Professor Slughorn who closed the door with a click at the nod of her head. She pointed her wand at the door and non-verbally cast a few spells at it to ensure they were not interrupted by unwanted visitors.
These two posts give us much insight to what was going on at Hogwarts while the trio was out searching for the Horcruxes. great writing Eviee, I'll be watching for your next. I hope you do well on your exams.
