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Old 09-12-2011, 05:04 AM   #63 (permalink)
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Janet Lynn Gordon
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Hey Allison, great writing! My goodness you're such a talent.
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"He is a very good teacher though," said Hermione with a slight frown. Given the amount of heckling that Hermione received from Snape on a pretty much consistent basis I was surprised to hear those words come out of her mouth.
I always admired Hermione for her capability of putting aside her likes or dislikes in a teacher for the sake of her learning.
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I looked up, letting out a small sigh. Of course...pick the telepath. Pushing back my chair I headed to the front of the room my wand at my side. If I didn't hit him with a spell, I would be laughed at, but if I did I would get detention....

Yeah...today was going to be a long day.
Loved that bit.

I love how you set up this bit;
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With an instinctive reaction I lifted my wand up in defense, but what I had not been expecting to happen was that in my attempt to read the spell that Snape was going to cast, I had confused my wand into thinking that that was the spell that I wanted to cast.
with this sentence;
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"Now, I want you all to keep in mind that nonverbal spells are not something that is just magically going to happen because you have magic in you. It takes a lot of concentration and clear intent in order for this to happen successfully.
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What had I just done?
Indeed I think deserved it though. I just hope he isn't too hard on her.

Great chapter Allison. I'll be watching for your next.
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