Hey ~Otty! I've been trying all day to comment on this wonderful, brilliantly written chapter. I love, "Human Nature" by OtterySt.Catchpole, and I as much love this side story you are writing. I mentioned before how much I loved the very beginning of this epic story, when Hermione is looking at the picture of Silver Wind and reading the book Ottery had given her. He is the first character you introduced into the story, in a very casual way I might add. How was he going to tie into the story, and as the story progressed he wasn't mentioned again until this side story. I can't imagine the depth of your ability to create in your mind and put it to words the story arcs in this story(s) I must comment you for being able to keep everything in order, and tie things together, even as far back as the very first sentence of Human Nature to the present chapter.
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Seriously, I'm wrapping this up soon, it's just ... so many ... characters. *cries*
:tackle: Please don't think you have to hurry on my account. I wish it could just go on and on and on.
Now about this chapter. I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love it when you write about Hermione with Silver Wind, and the cryptic messages you have in there for us to figure out, or just read and enjoy the hallucinations in her coma. I for one sit and think forever about this and that and what it means. I think I have some pretty fantastic theories that of course I will not disclose.
("nobody likes spoiled milk" I was once told
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I am however having a little bit of difficulty theorizing what this means.
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Still, what were the trees trying to tell her?
You are too good at your craft ~Otty.
And this leads into one of my favorite parts of this chapter:
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The frizzy haired girl bent down to drink and got a face full of water splashed on her face. Hermione spluttered and fell back onto the sand. She could hear the sound of Silver Wind’s laughter but along with it was another and she wondered who else was there.
“Hiya toots,” came a sharp little voice and she looked to see an otter swimming on his back holding a shell in one hand and winking at her. “I heard you’re looking for company …” he said suggestively.
Hermione splashed the little otter back. "I'm looking for my spirit animal you pesky little fiend." She took a handful of water and drank.
"I totally peed in the water, you know," the little otter remarked. Hermione spluttered and Silver Wind and the otter laughed.
So hilarious! I will say though, this part fuels my theory.
Pay no mind to the negging feeling that you are being channeled.
It is only me in disguise trying to dig deeper into your written word, and what's in between the lines.
And finally, poor, poor Ron. What is there to say, but have heart Ron. We're all pulling for Hermione. (along with Ottery I whisper quietly, as this chapter is all about Hermione and Ron
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Well, this has not been short and concise, but oh well, that only happens once in a blue moon with me.
Great chapter ~Otty! I'll be watching for your next. I'm on the ~Otty Express for Destination Super Epic FanFiction!:choochoo: