Hello Kae. I was so happy to see you posted another chapter. I've been having trouble with my computer, and while I could read new posts, I didn't trust it to comment hardly at all. But, I think I can now. I'll give it a try anyway. I love the way you set the scene of, Indie, being so tired she could barely drag herself along. Her little back and forth with Hermione added to the scene and made her mood very believable. And then true to what love does to a person, she perked up when Harry meets her on the starewell. I loved that so much! Very nice writing.
It was cute how you made Harry all shy and uncomfortable when he was trying to ask her to meet at Hagrids the following day, just like when in GOF he was trying to ask Cho to the Ball. So adorable. Again, very well written.
This was my favorite part:
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Nodding again, this time a little faster, Indie couldn't help but smile. It wasn't a regular smile though, it was one of those gimpy show-every-tooth-including-your-wisdoms smiles. But, either way, Harry returned the favor in a similar, gimpy fashion.
Although, she wasn't sure whether her face matched her gut. She still had the butterflies, but they'd sunk a little. They weren't as graceful as before...
However, before Harry left to go to his dormitory, Indie managed to muster up a few words, no matter how stupid she thought they'd sound.
"Lunchtime it is..."
I could so easily see this in my mind. Very pleasant reading Kae. Very well written, and I can't wait to read the next. I'll be watching.
