Hello ~Otty. I was thrilled you posted again. I read it this morning at 4:00 and was just too sleepy to comment. I'll do it now though I am very tired. I loved the writing in the beginning where you have us feeling how cold it is there by your descriptions and then you have Ottery climbing out from underneath heavy bedding and I'm thinking if I was Ottery I'd not be able to get out of that bed and face the cold. He does though and you go on to show it is painfully cold, but our Ottery is able to make himself move on for he knows he must. Maybe the cold is a blessing in disguise for him. MAYBE it slows the spread of the poison some. Oh...
the poison is hurting him. That is soooooo sad!
Loved this bit:
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The boy touched one bare foot on the floor winced, jumped back on the bed and kneeling by the edge of the bed waved his wand over his head and magicked himself a nice outfit. It was something pre-Victorian but just barely, a top hat, long coat, striped trousers with straps under his shoes.
“If this doesn’t make me look like one of those old foppish vamps, I don’t know what will,” the dark haired boy remarked quietly.
He stepped on the ground and dipping the top hat’s rim just over his eyes he walked into one of his friend’s adjoining bedrooms.
What an outfit! But he needs a walking stick, or cane.
And this part is just plain ... well I won't say brilliant, cause it's already been said ^ ... so I'll say. ummm ... intensely significant.
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“Ottery, master thief,” he said grimacing. He winced again as he felt a pang in his chest. The poison was working its way slowly into his circulatory system, causing his heart to spasm. When enough of the poison had slowly seeped in and accrued his heart would simply stop. But he had no intention of letting that happen, no matter what. He might not be the chosen one but Harry was, and Harry was also impulsive and stupid and he needed all the friends he could have by his side. Dumbledore trusted the kid for whatever reason and Ottery would see that Harry fulfilled his destiny even at the cost of everything he had built.
“Why not? It’s not as if Scrimgeour hasn’t already found out my deepest darkest secrets.” Ottery sighed. That was another dilemma he’d soon have to deal with. And he hadn’t been to see Hermione or Ron. The poor boy must be wracking his brains out by now about her.
Let's hope Scumgeour takes the secrets to his grave. But let me just say that although I love you very much, I don't like you saying that Harry is impulsive and stupid, and that he needs all his friends he could have by his side.
But, I won't fault you for it. The movies make him look that way, so you are allowed your opinions.
but, I do love that Ottery is loyal to Harry.
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if only people would ask more questions …
I have some questions, but then I don't want anything of spoiled milk and story changes to occur so, I'll reserve the right to ask questions later. I know you are busy actually and just haven't had time to write more. These are the things I'm curious about;
Hermione and her dream spirit. Is he guiding her journey to wellness? Will she remember him when she wakes up?
Has Harry and Nicholas oh and Neville, finished their plans? And how are they well, I'll save my question for if you don't answer. (Which I'm sure you will cause you always do.)
Madison and Freddie? I can't stand the thought of Freddie dying, AND I don't want Madison owing that monster a favor, even if she decides to double cross him, it's a dangerous thing to do. And I know she can take care of herself, but sometimes things don't always work out the way you want.
Was Teddy and his rampage what brought Ottery to his conciousness? And I'm watching to see if Diego has anything up his sleeve or behind his cloak for the monster that hurt Freddie.
These things are what I'm watching for. But if you want a question then I guess mine is ...
Do you ever tire of writing out the grocery list? For me, it's the same old thing cause we can't afford anything else. So I DO get tired of the grocery list.
Just teasing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I am very curious if Ottery is going to have to become undead or whatever. That still isn't a question though is it. OK here you go; does Harry ever do anything that graduates Ottery's opinion of him to a higher level of confidence as Dumbledore has in him?
Can't wait for your next post ~Otty. I'll be watching.
