Hello Emily. You do so well with moving your story along without shocking the readers. (Me anyway) I love the opening scene and the dialogue between mother and daughter. I love showing Emily's flashbacks and the feelings that came to her mind. I love the effects of the flashbacks that she had. You show how real a person is by doing that. I love Ruthie's response to Emily when she told her she could tell her anything.
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Ruthie rolled her eyes. “I can’t tell you, you’re my mother,” Ruthie said in a matter of fact tone. Emily laughed lightly.
Very typical response, but the way you didn't have Ruthie be a smart alec about it was precious. It was just a remark made with honest emotion.
I'm not proud of George however.
What gives him the right to make that the question to ask her. He should have just stuck with, "What's going on Ruthie?" if he had to ask her something. And he could have had a better attitude asking her also. I wonder how long Ruthie will stay there without running out in tears. And I don't blame her for being hurt and angry. I don't feel envious of Emily now that she has to try and convense Ruthie that telling her was the right thing to do. George sure flubbed up this time.
Great post Emily. I'll be watching for your next.
