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Hey Eviee. Sometimes I do feel sorry for Snape. He's kind of caught between a rock and a hard place. He has to pass the part of Voldemort's right hand man, yet still keep his promise to Dumbledore. And nobody knows either way, except for Dumbledore of course. Very nice chapter. I'll be watching for your next.
By the way... Congratulations on your Golden Goblin Award
Haii Connie! Yeah i feel the same, it wasn't until i wrote and posted this story that i realized what i had done, captured both his good and bad side. Both roles that he had to play. Kinda didn't mean to do that Oh well it came out good.
You wont have to wait long, he's the next chapter. And thank you ever so much! I could say the same for you!
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Originally Posted by ashfig
it's been so long, i practically reread the first parts. but i like this. and snape. even though i still dont like snape too much. maybe im just being stubborn
Ah you know your writing a good story when a reader says' she's re-read the entire story to keep up! even if it's only a page! XDDD
Thank you for reading and here's the next post!
Meh you'll warm to Snape in the end...i promise
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Originally Posted by sarahb
I love the story!! Poor Sev it must be hard to run a scool as a baddy when he is such a goody. Keep up the great work. Pams
And by the way, CONGRATS!!! On your Golden Goblin.
°°°Sarah
Haii Sarah!
Thank you! I'm beginning to really like this story too! I'm really feeling for Snape now! I already know how this ends You'll just have to wait...
And THANK YOU!
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Originally Posted by bonnieginnyfan1
Eviee!
Love Snape in this chappie! <3 Keep up the great work!
Can't wait for more, as always! *waits*
♥Stef♥
Stef! < and that's just the beginning XDD
I'm glad you really like the story so far and i hope the next chapter will be as good! *huggles*
Here's more!
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Originally Posted by XenoLongbottom
AWESOME!!!!!! Please write more!
Well hello there new reader. I'm Evangeline!
Welcome and thank you for reading.
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Originally Posted by Stethoscope12
Evvie: you always continue to amaze me with your writing!! It's great I love it!! I"m jealous that I can't write like that!
Alyssa!
Haha do i really? I still do believe that i'm any good!
Thank you ever so much for reader and here's more! and i bet your really good! Everyone had their ways of writing things.
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Originally Posted by Hera
Ooohhh poor Snape! and poor McGonagall! *pets them both*
EEeeek I hope you post again soon! this is SO good! *huggles you* You're writing is absolutely spectacular!
x
Emily.... You made it. YAY!
I know right! I think i felt really sorry and teary for Snape in the last book/movie more then anyone else! :O haven't practically liked him in the past
*huggles you* It's not that good! hahah, but here's the next chapter i hope you really like*prods*
x
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Originally Posted by Lunax246
Is officialy stalking! From no on I love it....it's just over-flowing with awesomness
*stalks and waits*
Nat! You made it! Haha, thank you for reading even if you were about to go to bed! *eyes Shh*
I'm really happy that you are stalking and here's the next chapter...shame you went to bed already XDD
Dedicated to my three close friends; Laila, Maura and Stef
Created; Falling In Love At A Coffee Shop
Dumbledore sighed once the room was once again quiet, the ring of the oak door being slammed still echoed in his ears, it vibrated through his canvas painting and shocked him deep down. He'd said the wrong thing he knew it but it had to be done to remind him. He must not make mistakes! Harry needed him even if he didn't know it.. or wouldn't believe it. His thoughts carried him further down away from the murmurs rising around him once more.
He had to think, He had to think.
"Dumbledore.." A voice growled from somewhere in the room, he looked up, "...do you really think giving such a task to someone like him, a Death Eater no doubt" The voice said again, it came from the left of Albus, from the portrait of Phineas Nigellus Black. His lips closed in a straight line and his eyes never left that of Albus Dumbledore.
"Must I remind you, Phineas, that Death Eaters run in your family..."
"Yes but I wasn't one of them, I cursed those who chose the dark side," Phineas piped back, using his arms to further show his meaning.
"Oh quiet Phineas, We've heard it all before," Another portrait piped up joining the conversation.
Phineas, however, carried on, "I am embarrassed to be part of a family of Death Eaters."
"Given the chance you would have become one yourself." Another person called over.
"How dare you!...." Phinease roared to the point of breaking his portrait from the shackles against the wall. This caused an uproar from the remaining headmasters and mistresses.
Dumbledore listened for a moment sighing, will they ever learn? He heard insults such as 'mudblood', 'you never deserved to be headmaster of this school' before he lost his patience.
"Quiet!" He called to the room, one by one they all fell silent. Phineas the last with one last 'mudblood'. Albus waited a moment before speaking.
"I trust Severus with my life," Albus stated matter-of-factly, then he turned away.
"Sometimes that's not enough," Phineas hissed, loud enough for those either sides of him to hear. They rolled their eyes at this tempted to spark yet another fight by responding but they didn't. Phineas looked dissapointed.
ooh I am first! HOORAY!! I really liked Phineas arguing with the other portraits. Oh, and I'm not sure if you meant it or not, but Dumbledore says "I trust Severus with ME life" I laughed cuz I read it with an Irish accent... PAMS!
Aww great chapter. I like the arguement with Phineas. It was funny. I love how Dumbledore says "I trust Snape with me life." And Snape killed him.
pams
carrot lover (not) // torturously friendly // secret spy // HP nerd // <3 sparkles // who am I?
Evieee! :tackle: I'm here! *pitches tent* I love your story so far! As I said before, I love your writing style and I always enjoy reading whatever you share with us.
ooh I am first! HOORAY!! I really liked Phineas arguing with the other portraits. Oh, and I'm not sure if you meant it or not, but Dumbledore says "I trust Severus with ME life" I laughed cuz I read it with an Irish accent... PAMS!
Haha congratulations on being the first to post. I should get you a certificate
Whoops, i did correct the mistake, seemed normal with my English accent XD but i do love to make my readers laugh.
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Originally Posted by Stethoscope12
LOVE IT!!!!! write more now please!!
I love the even in death Dumbledore still has 'power' over the other portraits!!
If i was Phineaus, I'd point out that he did trust him with his life...and it killed him!! lol
Haii Alyssa, your wish has been granted. A new chapter right here! *points down*
Ah Dumbledore will always be the top man, and yeah but he chose his own death remember. Snape didn't want to kill him.
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Originally Posted by sarahb
Aww great chapter. I like the arguement with Phineas. It was funny. I love how Dumbledore says "I trust Snape with me life." And Snape killed him.
pams
Sarah
Haii Sarah i'm glad i made you laugh and thank you for reading. I hope to get you interested in the rest of the story.
Haha everyone's bringing that up...everyone makes mistakes right? thank again!
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Originally Posted by Hera
ROFL!! ohh that was brilliant! haha, I've always wondered what the portraits do when nobody's there. So now I know. They bicker
Can't wait to see what happens next!!!
PAMS!
Emily, Emily, Emily. Welcome..*uses creepy voice*
Haiiii! *bounces* I'm glad i filled your thoughts to an extent, the portraits. Gotta love them XDD
New chapter! *points down*
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Originally Posted by bonnieginnyfan1
Good chappie Eviee, even though it was short, it kept me in the story really well! <3
Can't wait for more!
♥Stef♥
Stef thank you for dropping by, i know your having a busy RL. How is all that? school and everything.
Thank you for the comment i look forward to it, and i promise the chapters are getting longer.
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Originally Posted by crookshanks_kitty
Evieee! :tackle: I'm here! *pitches tent* I love your story so far! As I said before, I love your writing style and I always enjoy reading whatever you share with us.
Ava << I got it right! this is the point where you correct me XD
Thank you for reading, *eyes tent* Would you like some decorations for that tent?
Aww thank you, i could always say the same for you. I could mistake you for an autor already your that good. I'm not joking.
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Originally Posted by LillyJames
I am pitching a tent next to crookshanks to wait for the epic chapters to come!
Though i don't normally like Snape, I like him in this one.
Keep up the great work for you officially have a new reader!
PAMS
~Abby~
Haii Abby
Do you always want some decorations? I have plenty over here
Yeah i'm the same Snape hasn't been a big fan of mine but the idea for this story came to mind and i HAD to write it
And YAY for the new reader!!
Tea and Cake all round!
Dedicated to my three close friends; Laila, Maura and Stef
Created; Falling In Love At A Coffee Shop
"My Lord," Amycas whispered lending his head. He was alone in the room save for Lord Voldemort himself and those who lingered. Amycas waiting and staring at the old stone floor below him. A crack entered his view, it was deep and black. It ran the length of his line of sight, away from its center damage as if it wanted to get away fast.
He heard footsteps above him and a pair of feet came into view. The man wore no shoes, his white feet was covered with scratches and dirt marks but Amycas knew he didn't care, he couldn't feel.
"Amycas..." The Dark Lord said, his scratchy voice filled the large room and bounced off the stone walls around them. Amycas Carrow lifted his head and extended his arm. Taking the hem of his master's black robe he brought it to his mouth to kiss. He tasted dirty and grime and made a face to show his disgust glad that no one could see his face, "..Rise, what news do you bring?" Voldemort continued as if nothing had happened.
Amycas raised from the floor, his knee clicking in the process. He ignored the searing pain that went shooting up his leg and into his back and quickly glanced left and right. There were rubbles everywhere small and big and what looked like half the ceiling no longer where it should be. A heavy breeze blew through the gap into the ceiling above and blew through his growing hair and robes. He forced back a shiver and looked forward once more.
"He has been told My Lord, he didn't look best pleased."
"That was expected but you will do the plan..." Amycas interrupted whispering, "Yes My Lord."
"...where is your sister?" He gulped, he didn't like to be in the gaze of Lord Voldemort. No one did.
"S-she's at Hogwarts My Lord, she had to check a few things.." He paused.
"Check a few things? what would that be?" Amycas opened and closed his mouth, he had nothing to say. Sweat began to form on his palms, he gulped once more under the beady gaze of the Dark Lord.
"My Lord," A high pitched voice rang out with glee, he turned his head slightly to see Bellatrix bouncing into view, a smile plastered on her face. ",We have her, she tried to hide in the hollow of a tree.." She continued laughing gleefully.
"Excellent, where is she?" Lord Voldemort replied slowly showing one of his rare smiles, he moved away from the man, slightly shaking before him, and headed towards his favorite. Amycas began to breathe the air that he held. He followed the Dark Lord's figure and watched as he approached a happy Bella who had found a perch on a the top of a rubble of stone. He took the time to look around and truly see his surroundings.
Pillars lines each side of the room in lines of four, tilting his head he noticed they touched floor to ceiling holding the old structure in place. Some were badly damaged and he wondered how they stayed in place, other had simply holds of missing rock that meant nothing. His gaze moved onto search for more obvious signs. His eyes caught something glimmering on the floor, a hole in the stone with metal covering the sides as if it was suppose to hold something. Some sort of post for a bench, at this thought his eyes flickered to the front where the front would be. Also badly damaged. They were in a church, a church that put up a fight but now empty. It didn't look like any normal church it looked like one that was once big but now gone. Long forgotten many many years before.
"..she's in the rooms below," Whatever Bella had been saying before he hadn't caught nor cared. Gulping he piped up;
"My Lord...the school...discipline.." He chocked out, Voldemort stared at him once more.
"Yes, yes go. I expect updates Amycas," He turned away once more and breathed again glad to be out of the spotlight. Amycas turned on his heels and disappeared...
Hey Eviee, great chapters. Sorry its taking me so long to catch up on these chapters. I'm with Hera;
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Great chappie sweetie! ... and who'd have thought I'd ever feel sorry for the Carrows.
I wouldn't wish Voldamort's wrath on anyone, even dirty rotten evil monsters like the Carrows. I am anxious to find out why he is so anxious to find her. What did she do? I reckon we'll find out soon. It doesn't seem like Amycas is doing much to defend his sister, or try to protect her. A disfunctional family I ever did see.
I'll be watching for your next.
oh great chapter I am a bit confused by who she is though???? Keep up the great work. I'll be waiting for more.
Sarah
Thank you for reading (: And It's alright the who the 'she' is should be revealed soon enough. thank you again for reading.
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Originally Posted by LillyJames
Oh Great chapter!
I'm kind of confused too. But I'm sure you'll clear it up soon!
PAMS
~Abby~
Haii Abby, haha I seem to have confused everyone with who the 'she' is but as i told Sarah above that will be revealed soon enough i hope!
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Originally Posted by ashfig
oooh very well written...i'm a bit nervous/scared *hides*
Haiii thanks for reading and you are? Whoops wasn't suppose to scare you! *hides* haha
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Originally Posted by bonnieginnyfan1
I'm a bit confused too!
Maybe I'll find out in the next chappie....
Great work Eviee! <3
♥Stef♥
Stef!
Sorry for confusing you, will reveal who the 'she' is soon enough I promise! *nods* Sadly this chapter you will not find out who that is though. I'll save that for another time.
Thanks for reading.
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Originally Posted by AvisPhoenix74
Such a good chapter! I love your writing!
Thank you! More down below for you!
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Originally Posted by Hera
Great chappie sweetie! ... and who'd have thought I'd ever feel sorry for the Carrows.
PAMS!!!
Emily, Emily, Emily
*breaths* Okay thank you for reading, and feeling sorry for the Carrows!? HAHAHAH, believe me I was not feeling sorry for them when i wrote this.
Luff youuu....
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Originally Posted by Mordanyes
*catches up* Woah! These chapters I've missed have been brilliant! I love them PAMS
Haiii welcome back! and thank you for reading and commenting!
Aww really? THANK YOU! *huggles you*
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Originally Posted by crookshanks_kitty
Hey Evie! Great chapter. I love your descriptions.
I wonder who the woman is. I can't wait to find out.
PAMS (please)?
Haii, thank you for reading and commenting!
and i will reveal who the women is in a few chapters to come.
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Hey, new reader. great story! can't wait to read more!!
-Rachel
Haii Rachel, thank you for reading and your very welcome here! I try to have a little comment for every reader and I do try to make them different and personal to that person. ANYWAY, Welcome and thank you for reading. I hope this next chapter will be up to the standards as the rest.
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Originally Posted by Connie
Hey Eviee, great chapters. Sorry its taking me so long to catch up on these chapters. I'm with Hera;I wouldn't wish Voldamort's wrath on anyone, even dirty rotten evil monsters like the Carrows. I am anxious to find out why he is so anxious to find her. What did she do? I reckon we'll find out soon. It doesn't seem like Amycas is doing much to defend his sister, or try to protect her. A disfunctional family I ever did see.
I'll be watching for your next.
I can always count on a long loving comment from you Connie It's quiet alright with the wait on the comment I don't mind i know you've been through a lot these past few weeks and I hope your alright now? Haha your ganging up on me! But i agree with you and Emily I really wouldn't want Voldemort to single me out and the such, he's scary! Ah you mean the women? Yes I will reveal who that person is soon enough but I hope this chapter is alright, At the moment I'm still introducing all the character point of views then i will carry the story forward. Other then this one I have one more point of view another couple if i decide to add them later but they wont be main POV'S and then it will become Snape's story all the way
Ah i believe all those who are Death Eaters are from a disfuctional family.
Dedicated to my three close friends; Laila, Maura and Stef
Created; Falling In Love At A Coffee Shop
The hilltop was not particularly high but high enough that anyone who stood on it would feel the heavy breeze blowing towards it. It rustled the high grass in different directions wildly and rustled the leaves of the only tree on the hill. The wind gathered speed forcing a few weak leaves to give up on survival and get tumbled to the ground, spinning in circles. The wind died down finally after a few minutes letting the remaining leaves fall limp against their stems.
A young girl stood alone, her hand lying lightly on the bark of the tree. She watched on over the hill at the rising sun. It peeped over the horizon, casting a soft golden glow on the countryside around her, and the valley of houses that stood about a mile below her. As the sun grew higher, the girl lifted her limp arm and shielded her eyes from the blazing sun. The breeze still blew over the hill but not as bad as before, her soft red hair that laid to just below her mid back blew slightly and the wind whispered across her pale cheek. She wore simple muggle clothing, a white dress that hugged her waist but fell loosely around her knees.
Anyone looking on would wonder why an eleven - going on twelve - year old stood alone, but no one did. She was simply alone. Moving, finally, the young girl bent to pick up the small dark bag that laid at her feet and slung it over her shoulder.
She began to walk slowly down the hill towards the valley, now that the sunrise had been and gone she needed to move on. Birds chirped all around her welcoming the new day, a new beginning. It didn't take her long to descend the remaining hill and breach, the boundary of the sleeping village. People on the left and the right were walking up, some faster than others. One such man clearly coming close to the end of his long life sat in a creaking rocking chair, he held a large book in his lap but made no attempt to read it. Instead his beady eyes roamed round the somewhat sleepy village doing what he did best. Nose around.
He didn't see her, no one did. They couldn't, she was dead to the world yet still alive. Tucking a strand of hair behind her ear she pressed on passing the not yet opened stalls and stores. She reached the middle of the market place within a few minutes and stepped up towards the water fountain that sat there. She dropped her small black bag when she reached it, leaning over she cupped her hands under the water and brought it to her lips. The ice cold water stung the inside of her mouth for a moment before it slide down her throat refreshing her. She cupped her hand under the water once more and repeated the action.
She went to reach the water a third time when she felt it, the cold stare she knew, learned to like but not love. The young girl looked up and there he was, he wasn't how she remembered him. He was older, his hair longer but still the same color. He stared at her looking scared, unsure on what he was seeing. His face stretched into a smile as she took a step forward but he stepped back.
She stopped, pain ran through her to the core. Her friend, her dear sweet friend that she loved with all her heart. She loved him. Always. He-he was scared of her. She didn't understand why, the tears prickled the corners of her eyes. She couldn't stay, she had to go. The young girl fell back a few paces before turning on her heels and running from the village.
Hey, great chapter! though, I have to say, I am super confused. I know you probably won't tell, but here goes: who is the girl?
who is looking at her/scared of her/who she loves?
is she the girl voldie is holding?
if not, who is that girl?
Well, now that ive pestered you with questions, I shall say again, you did a great job!
-Rachel